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:Well, I do seem to look at this somewhat differently. But on looking it all over again, I think the whole thing still has bigger problems. I think it was originally written in a way that assumed the reader already had an understanding of the main details. It occurs to me that this is the wiki's primary exposition of those details, and such assumptions should not be made here. For starters, I see a need to split the first paragraph into two. I'm going to give it another run, and let's see if I can work out some of the kinks that are bothering you as well. [[User:Giles|Giles]] ([[User talk:Giles|talk]]) 06:43, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
:Well, I do seem to look at this somewhat differently. But on looking it all over again, I think the whole thing still has bigger problems. I think it was originally written in a way that assumed the reader already had an understanding of the main details. It occurs to me that this is the wiki's primary exposition of those details, and such assumptions should not be made here. For starters, I see a need to split the first paragraph into two. I'm going to give it another run, and let's see if I can work out some of the kinks that are bothering you as well. [[User:Giles|Giles]] ([[User talk:Giles|talk]]) 06:43, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
::With the new wording, it seemed to me like the section started too abruptly with no context. I added something to try to make it flow better. Don't know if I succeeded or not. [[User:Zendowolf|Zendowolf]] ([[User talk:Zendowolf|talk]]) 16:41, 1 February 2022 (UTC)